Talofa readers,
My class have been learning about descriptive writing.
Our goals are:
I can add interesting words and phrases to create an image for the readers
I can structure a descriptive passage
I can use Similies, Metaphors, Onomatopoeia, Hyperbole, (Exaggeration) and Personification
Our teacher ade pictures for us to make a story this is one image :
My favourite part about this task was writing the story .
We put it on class companion, Improved the story and copied the feed back.
This was my feed back:
Spelling
6 / 6
(high score)
- Great job with spelling! You spelled high-frequency and some difficult words correctly. Keep up the good work by continuing to check your spelling as you write.
Structure and language
5 / 6
(high score)
- Your story is well-structured with a clear beginning, middle, and end. The dialogue helps develop the plot and characters. You improved the transition between events, making the story more engaging. To make it even better, ensure that each part of the story is equally developed. For example, you could add more about the crew’s initial thoughts when they see the monster.
Then we used descriptive writing to turn it into a story: