My imagination camp

Camp is a thing we do every year from yr 5 to yr 8 and it is the most exiting part of the year! School  camp is in 3 more days and we are creating what our school camp would be if we got to choose what we would do, and where it will be. I did a story with 5 paragraphs, the story  had to have 4 things for it, Accommodation, food, activities, and how we will earn the money. Activities like this embrace my imagination  and make me feel like I can do whatever I desire. I understand if you don´t want to read it all it is quite long but I would really appreciate hearing back from you and hearing how I can improve on my learning.

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