Below is a story from class. We had to add detail into our writing. This includes what we see, hear and feel. I found it easy to add detail into the story. Do you like writing?
The day came on friday the 8:3:2024 it was the duathlon day.it was on the school fired.The whole school did it.we were runing and swimming and a bit more runing.Because it fun and fitness for everyone.I could see my mum,the sky,grass ms mat,kids.I could hear kids going crazy in the and saying go mason and my mum said go sun go sun! i feelt like i was going to came first place because stawart was slowing down in the pool. I fort xavier
well came 3 place But boston came 3 place and I fort stawart wond cach me but he did.n cach me.It was a buwful day for a raceing.