WALT: Empathise
“Put yourself in their shoes” – we were pretending to be the little kid.
WALT: show not tell using our 5 senses.
“Paint a picture in the readers head”
All of a sudden I saw a big black figure looking at me, I didn’t know what it was because of my vision, I rubbed my eyes so I could finally see. I gasped upon what I saw. It looked like a hairy buff person but with more hair. All of a sudden I got distracted from this bloody scent. It smelled so disgusting, like someone was in murder scene, I saw dripping blood falling from the big gorilla’s mouth.
My heart dropped as the gorilla looked at me like he was trying to intimidate me. I tried to back up from him but my head board blocked me from going back so I tried to get up but it felt like heavy weights were wrapped around my waist so there was no way for me to run. I felt so scared, my whole body turned numb. I hid under my covers and stayed there for as long as i could and when i peeked out to see if the gorilla was still there, poof the gorilla was gone and never came back.
