This is the grade I received for my Sophie Pascoe. ( I am very proud of my grade
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These things I did well was understand the film topics, justify the examples with clear explanations, use sexy paragraphs and use technical skills to show I have control over my writing.
My next steps are to use more ambitious words, try not to repeat words and find alternatives that I would say aloud
that don’t make my writing awkward.
| Things you’ve done well…
You have done a great job of this essay Paige
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Next steps…
I think you could broaden your vocabulary…become a bit more ambitious. When you are in the crafting phase – have a look for repeated or weak words and look up synonyms or use a thesaurus to find alternatives. e.g. – you have used the word ‘happy’ on repeat Make sure you find alternative words that you feel good about using (you understand them and feel like you would say them) so it doesn’t feel awkward |
Overall Grade:
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