We have been learning about where we put our comas and full stops and checking our writing top to bottom.
One fine summer day, I was playing call of duty on my game, when my mum walked in and put a box on my lap. While she was walking away she said
“You should open the present I got for you”
When she said that I instantly got interest for what was in the box I opened one side of the box and then a puppy jumped out wagging its tail with his tongue out. I liked it at first until I saw the puppy’s missing leg I threw him on the ground and went back to playing my game, when the dog interrupted me by barking and jumping on my leg so I kicked the puppy away it found my red ball so he got it and brung it to me but I had no interest in playing so I kicked it away in a box but it kept falling so the puppy persevered and finally made it but, the box fell on him but he got his nose underneath the box and flipped it over. He put the ball by my feet again but instead of kicking it I picked it up, got my crouchers and went to the door and yelled.
“MUM WE WILL BE OUTSIDE”
We went outside and played excitedly and happily.
I have done my best to reach my writing goal and have gone back to correct it.